One of the first stories I ever wrote was some Star Trek fan fiction while I was in college. Star Trek was still in its
The story was an offshoot of the episode “Lower Decks” and followed the exploits of a group of lower rank crew members. At one point, there was a battle between the Enterprise and a Ferenghi cruiser and I literally went shot by shot for at least a page.
The dialog was all about firing phasers and photon torpedoes. The action prose was about the rocking ship and the impact of the enemy's weapons. The Enterprise naturally won and I finished my story. I was rather proud of the very amateur piece and submitted it to the moderator for approval. A few days later she e-mailed me with a rejection saying it wasn't quite what they were looking for.
When you watch a science fiction movie, there is generally a tremendous amount of action. Space battles, daring chases through asteroid fields with a little story mixed in. You can't do that in a book. A scene that may take 30 seconds or a minute in a movie can drag out for pages in a book.
A good science fiction writer must craft a story that is character driven because relying on action will simply lose your reader in a sea of photon torpedoes. This is especially true in short stories. Keep the intense action to a minimum unless it significantly drives the plot.